The Girl From Ishval

This is a renewed version of the first story. I felt that I needed to improve things majorly, and drastic changes have been made to My Oc's backstory.
Also, one change to the story is Major Armstrong is much more involved. Although he would obviously be a slightly frustrating person to be around (considering him constantly ripping his shirt off and insisting you "feast your eyes upon... something something passed down the Amrstrong family for generations." However, I took into consideration how nice this giant man really is, how much he cares about those around him (like Ed and Al, etc.) I also noticed how he was pretty much the only soldier in Ishval who literally refused to kill anyone there
He was holding that kid after all, and helped some Ishvalans escape. While is sister said this was cowardice, I don't think so. He and Edward Elric think a lot, after all, Ed and Al refused to use a Philosopher's stone after figuring out how it was made, and they don't want to kill anyone or see anyone be killed. (in the 2003 anime Ed had a literal meltdown after killing Greed so yeah, proof enough.)
So yeah. I don't think Armstrong was cowardly for not doing what every other soldier there was doing. Sue me for not being a heartless person. (I'm kidding, I'm sure most people aren't as mean as his sister, who needs older-sibling lessons from Ed in my opinion.)

Please, let me know if you enjoy this version or the previous more, if you think this one is better but still needs improvement, or the other one, or you just despise both, please kindly let me know why you dislike it and what can be fixed!

Also, the artwork in this cover picture was done by me!!