Novelty Essay

Full title: Innovative neural impulse brain prosthetics and the speculative implications of their standard use.
If you have the time to spare.......
Critique/ rip this apart pls
was wondering in particular if you could tell me if it flows/ reads well naturally as a cohesive piece of writing and also how accessible and understandable it is on a first read.
Note= Grammar and citations are incomplete and all over the place.