The Monster Of Man (FEEDBACK NEEDED)
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I would really love some feedback on this! I've always really enjoyed reading and have dabbled in some forms of writing over the years. Recently, I've been thinking of writing a book but I want feedback to know if it's any good. The problem is I'm too embarrassed to ask anyone I know as I'm only 17 and this is my first attempt at writing anything seriously. I just want honest criticism and advice and just to know if you like the basic format and style of my writing.
Just as a quick basic overview of the scene a boy and his family move to stay with relatives after moving from their family home after experiencing difficulties. The premise is quite sinister and the male character of George will be the main contributor to this.
I would really appreciate any opinions of this (good or bad!) and I am mainly just looking for feedback on the basic format and style at this point.
Thanks!
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