Theft, Murder And Perhaps, Even Kidnap

Hi everyone! This is a remake of my story "Theft, Murder And Perhaps, Even Kidnap." I have remade my book because I felt it could be improved and I have made a few changes to characters, chapters and names of places. It is the same plot just improved and some parts may sound the same and some are, it's because I've read through my old one and have kept most parts but just edited other parts. So please read this one and comment Pros and Cons but if you want to put a con try to put a positive thing first! Here's the Brief:

A mystery/thriller

By Emily J Bullivant

The ghost, seaside town of Sleepford holds many secrets held in the walls of the houses and trapped in the people who walk the glooming streets.

Charity Willis has the perfect life working as an author in the city and sleeping with her admirable girlfriend, Gemma Barlow. However, when she finds an unexploded bomb in her cellar, she begins to come to terms with the many flaws of the Willis family.After traumatic events, Charity sets of to Sleepford to try to recover from the recent events.

A wedding leaves Charity with many questions about her past and goes searching around the four towns that surround Sleepford and Sleepford itself for answers.

At first the people of Sleepford are loveable and gracious. She gets intrigued by curiously giving charity worker, Hector Raymond. However, once he introduces her to hard alcohol, Charity slowly finds herself drawn into a web of theft, murder and perhaps, even kidnap.

Can Charity resist the charms of Hector Raymond and uncover the secrets of the unexploded bomb, her past and Sleepford before it's too late, or will her decease become yet another Sleepford mystery?