I wrote this story in 8th grade as my try-out for Power of the Pen (www.powerofthepen.org). Keep in mind that this is the very first real story I wrote, okay I wrote others before this, and they were good considering the age I was when I wrote them, I just have to find them and type them up. With that said, don't be too hard on me with critisim, if you want to criticize something of mine, look at the other stories I have posted, they were all written within the last 2 years. Thank you and enjoy! =)