I MADE IT WORSE! A lot of the detail was lost. I tried to make the detail in this one push the plot forward but that kinda failed. Somehow I forgot a plot. There's really know conflict (should have punched Marina again haha) so it's like a really bad story. I also said I would change the ending. Now there is no ending. I suck. It's also in 2nd person again. NOBODY LIKES SECOND PERSON!! *sigh* y do I do this. Here's some good things about it v No big blocks of texts though :D. Lots of dialogue (I should be a play writer) if it gets confusing, well, sucks for you. Also more characters yay. It's fun to write more people even though I'm bad at it. Better paced? There's more times now. Probably makes sense? ... that's all the good? So little... (No tags so nobody can find this) (sorry if you did find this)