The Boy in Fourth Grade
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Publikasi terakhir Kam, Jun 21, 2018
this memoir is near and dear to my heart. the events have impacted who I an today, so I want to get it right. so far, I've gotten no constructive criticism, only people talking about how much they love it. that's where you come in. I want you to tell me what you think. what did you like? what did you not like? how do you think something you disliked could be done better? how did each section make you feel? how does the story make you feel overall? once I get enough review, I'll revise it and post the revision as another chapter. we'll continue until we get it to it's full potential. this is my pride and joy, so please help me perfect it.
Rules:
-be respectful to everyone. this is a group effort.
-no comment is too silly or stupid. say what you need, just keep the first rule in mind.
we're all friends here. I'm honored you chose to help me, and I hope we can make something incredible together.
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