Chrono's Time

*First of all, Criticism will be strongly appreciated since this is a script for a manga"
Lucian, a 17 year old student that goes to S.K.Y Academy. His life is so boring and he think that his life predictable until one day when he forgets to get his grandpa a present for his birthday. He goes to the mall in search for an item for his grandpa. He finally finds what he needed to find and runs hastly home and decides to take a short cut home but instead of finding less time he finds his own death. He runs into several criminals that eventually shoot him but then he is saved by six shadowy characters. They give him a watch (time teller) to travel back in time before he was killed. Later on that night he learns the truth behind the time teller and that he is a vahlian?! But who tells him? and how does this person know? As a user as the time teller he must follow these two laws: Death's wish: In order to save some life, some one else life must be taken but it is taken at random in the last 24 hours and it is taken at random so you don't chose. Law of Vahlian: states when passing on their power to an offspring, only the oldest kid will get the power when the parent of that power dies but when the kid dies and no one is next in line to get the powers of that god then the power will go to the person that defeated that person. When the oldest child dies then the power gets passed on to the next child. He soons finds out that they are other Vahlians in this time period that are in danger as well... So now the adventure of chrono's time will start?!