Rough Draft
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Last published Wed, Jul 25, 2018
This is a rough draft for the first chapter of a story I'm writing.
This chapter takes place in a snowy city where the unnamed main character wanders the empty streets. After stargazing for what seems like hours, he falls asleep in the snow.
In next chapter,(Which hasn't been written as of the moment I'm writing this) the protagonist awakens in a snowy forest in a fantasy world where he meets a motley crew of individuals. The rest of the story revolves around their interactions and adventures.
The primary goal of this first chapter is to serve as a sort of limbo or purgatory for the protagonist, before he arrives in the world which the main story takes place.
My main reason for posting this, is for feedback. Specifically, grammatical errors I could fix and whether this is an interesting story or not and I should keep writing.
Please leave feedback accordingly, no matter how harsh the comment. I would like to see it all.
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