Warriors fanfiction: snow

This is a fanfiction from the second series of "warrior cats" by Erin Hunter that i'm working on. I have read to "warriors: dawn" and my story is actually based off of the tribe cats, where they are forced from their home by an avalanche. Cover photo is my oc by Alice Smith (Facebook).
This may come as a surprise on this site but I am accepting criticism, spelling errors, grammar errors, inconsistencies, all that crap just tell me about it, also try and tell me how I could improve the pacing (I'm struggling on that part), tell me anything wrong with it that isn't "this is stupid, you're stupid, stop being a writer, f**k you, kys." I am looking to improve and hating on me without telling me what's wrong doesn't help a damn bit.
Obviously the setting and tribes belong to Erin Hunter, but all of the characters are created by me.
(What do I set my copyright setting to for this?)