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☼ Chaque mois, j'offre le prix de la Grande Ourse à l'histoire que j'ai le plus apprécié dans toutes celles traités dans le mois. Seront jugées l'orthographe, l'intrigue et l'originalité, tout ce qui fait d'une histoire, un futur Best-seller à mon goût.
☼ Chaque mois, j'offre le prix de la Petite Ourse à l'histoire qui pour moi, a fait preuve de la plus grande originalité. Il montre votre potentiel d'écrivain cependant, il ne faut pas le prendre pour acquis, car seule l'originalité est jugée ici (pas l'orthographe par exemple).
☼ La couronne boréale revient à l'orthographe et à la grammaire la plus impeccable.
☼ Le prix du Dragon est attribué à mon/mes coups de cœur Fantastique.
☼ Le prix Cassiopée est remis à mon/mes coups de cœur Romance/ Roman d'adolescent.
☼ Le prix Orion est donnée à mon/mes coups de cœur Sci-Fi.
☼ Le prix Andromède concerne mon/mes coups de cœur qui concerne toutes les autres
catégories.
Ici, vous l'aurez compris, je critique vos œuvres et par la même occasion vous remet des prix. Attention, je serais intransigeante.
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