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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS and see what I think.
Don't worry, I'm not going out of my way to be brutally honest and mean just because I can because honestly, that's just painful. I will be as honest as I possibly can without tearing your character to shreds and giving ways you can improve.
I will review characters from existing universes as well, there's a list on the first page of fan bases I'm apart of.
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