Uninvited Guests

Hey guys so this is a short story I wrote based of a Mystery's Of Harris Brulier prompt for my writing class. (the prompt is the cover). The idea was that there was a picture and one sentence you had to include and the rest of the story was yours to write. So the idea is an original one I made. it wasn't like there was a specific setting or theme. The limit was four pages max but I went WAY over. I would've made it longer but anyways here's the shortest version of the story I could manage. Anyways I'm sorta proud of it so if you have any tips or criticism please ask first. It's kinda the first thing I've wrote out of months of writers block and general lack of motivation so it's not that good. Lemme know if you want me to continue or maybe to write the past of one of the characters. Though I doubt it'll get enough attention for anyone to want that. Either way, I had fun writing it and I hope you have fun reading it. Without further ado I present to you...