Picture Perfect Memory

Hi guys, this is a story I wrote a couple of years ago, but I gave up on it when I ran out of ideas, and I didn't really like how the story was going, But a couple of my friends read it and encouraged me to post it here and see what reaction I would get, so I did. This is copyrighted, I worked really hard on this even if it isn't that good. I would appreciate feedback though, so please feel free to comment! This is a very rough draft.

This is the beginning of Kiana's story, a twelve year old girl with pancreatic cancer. The aim of the story is to show her live through pictures which represent all of her and her family's best memories, along with her battle with cancer and the people she meets along the way.