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Hey guys :)
I know this story is writed in dutch but for the ones who actually read this one, please tell me what's still wrong in the story ;)
The details, the way off writing...
I'm still writing but I need to know wich parts didn't make sentence so I know on wich things I need to watch better...
I'm also searching for a good title so idea's are welcome! :)

The first part isn't necessary because it didn't really contribute to the story but for now, I'll let it be :p
I need to put some action in it but I just don't know how, any hints? :s

So: just comment! :D