Red strings of fate

This is an old piece of writing I found, after re-reading it I want to re-write and resurrect it just struggling on how to do it.

Notes and the what I like/hate sections are the only parts recently written. I would like criticism and ideas for stories lines please do not shit on my writing format, it's old, I just copied and pasted from the original.
Saying that you can correct spelling mistakes because my spelling STILL sucks

I might look into expanding this world and adding more couples and situations but need to start small.