The Children of Yig (Cthulhu Mythos)

I'm trying my hand at an original Lovecraft-inspired short story. It centers around Yig, one of the lesser-known deities in the Cthulhu mythos. This snake god was featured in "The Curse of Yig" by H. P. Lovecraft and Zealia Bishop, published in 1929 under Bishop's name.
I'm deliberately using a lot of "tell don't show" and minimal dialogue but not quite so wordy as Lovecraft was.