Secrets and Bruises

I wrote this short story for an assignment in English and now I'm writing a sequel. I'm really happy with how this story turned out. If there are any grammar mistakes don't be scared to tell me. I need all the feedback i can get. This short story is about a kid named Max who falls in love with Jack who has bullied him all three years of high-school. He is a nice handsome jock with a six pack of abs, brown hair and blue eyes. This short story takes place in a New York highschool named "Grapevine High." Everything is ok until his best friend Amanda and his brother Zeke found him beaten almost to death in the auditorium. Will he live or will he die? I'm kidding. I don't like sad endings but you have to end somewhere ansd not all stories have a happy ending. That's all i could give otherwise there would be alot of spoilers. If you guys wanna create pictures of what you think the characters look like or wanna change what Jack looks like be my guest. Okay I'm actually gonna stop talking now enjoy the story.