The Mystery of Phillip Lombard and Soldier's Island

This was my very sloppy english project. We had to rewrite the ending of ATTWN and add one of our favorite characters, I chose Malcolm Bright from Prodigal Son. As you can see my writing is sloppy and the story is messy, I will gladly take constructive criticism! Okay here's a synopsis; "Phillip Lombard awakens on the beach after Vera missed her shot. He discovers the bodies and angrily runs away, tripping down the stairs and falling unconscious as the cops from mainland make their way to the crime scene. The cops hire a profiler from the FBI to investigate this crime. A man named detective Malcolm Bright interrogates and profiles this crime, then he takes home the wounded Lombard." I will rewrite this or make a part 2 (if requested)!