Clean Car, Clean Mind

I wrote this story for Ariel Black maybe a year ago... Just making it up as I went along.
It's a short story about white collar work life and commuting.
I thought I was okay at the time, but I've just read it again, and I think it's pretty good, for a story with no planning whatsoever.
This was on MSN, and I copied and pasted it into a word document to save it.
Me: the end
Ariel: uh...okay.
Me: what do you think?
Me: ariel?
Ariel: It's mental.