Gone Fishing
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Last published Sun, Feb 28, 2016
This is a taster sample of a story I'm working on and I really would appreciate any kind of feedback please, from constructive criticism through editorial corrections and on to other comments.
Does the story engage you?
Do you want to read more?
Does it flow?
Do you find the characters interesting and want to know more about them and their situation(s)?
or Were you bored shitless and glad I only posted about 300 words?
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