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This is a short story I wrote a couple years ago when I first got into writing. Reading it over I see many flaws, but I would also like constructive criticism. Do please leave your comments, just don't be mean about it and please be honest.
~Yours truly, Sekkusudemon
P. S. Any pictures I use aren't mine so credit to the photographer/artist
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