Dread
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I started this story quite a while ago, and just recently I have found the motivation to pull it back up, and with any luck, finish it.
I would strongly appreciate any feedback/Criticisms that anyone is willing to throw my way.
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The story takes place in the late 18th century.
The main character is a girl, and her life is being told as a flashback, where she is now, currently losing her grip on reality.
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I think that this story is suited more for people of alternative taste, as I meant for it to be rather surreal.
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Let me know what you think,
What you got out of it,
And just your general thoughts.
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