Darkness Inside of the Iris

Darkness Inside of the Iris

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When I was searching for something else on my computer, I came across this poem with the saved name of "Darkness Inside of the Iris". I looked at the date when the file was created and this poem is like 5/6 years old. I do not really remember my mindset when I wrote it. It is very choppy - kind of like if you wrote it out on a mirror and then broke it or if you used different letters from parts of a newspaper to write it out. I guess it adds to the disjointed feeling portrayed in the poem with the very staccato breaks in the lines. I do not know where I was going with the ending: "The feeling/ Of the disillusion/ Of the illusion of/ Existence". No idea where that was going or if it even really makes sense, but I guess that it sounds cool so that was why it ended the poem. I did not really change much to the poem besides changing one line. It was originally "Who stares back", but I changed it to "Who's staring back". I'm just sharing this so you know the revision history of the poem, and maybe the change might have meaning for you as you engage with it.
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(edit) I forgot to add that this started out as a confessional journal about becoming clean after a 10 year + addiction to OTC cold meds, but that was not my style of writing, I liked the material so I wanted to expand it into a novel length work featuring the journal elements. To say this work is a roller coaster would put it lightly. Although there are elements of time travel I would consider my sudden transitions reality travel. I use actual experience and dreams as a foundation, then toss in some fourth wall breaking narratives (meta-fiction), with a sprinkling of facts and quotations from songs and factual articles. It tends to be written similarly to an essay sans the boring. I have been influenced strongly by Vonnegut and W. S. Burroughs , and a wide variety of album rock, and that bleeds through. The tags dystopian and dark humor describe the whole piece best but there is a lot of genre jumping. I've done a good deal of research, not just for factual things but for the type of writing I do. Although not technically fan fiction, there is a nod to Final Fantasy games. The cover photo is a shared copyright, Brian Barbour took the photo, I added treatments.

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