Dying Embers

So this is my first try at my own story (and a bit of a fan fiction, I believe). If there's any way you think I can improve the story, please let me know! I can't tell you too much, mostly because I'm still trying to figure out the story myself, but I'll let you know that it's based off of the Legend of Zelda series and will have a lot of references to it, such as loftwings, hylians, etc. But I've thrown my own little twists into the story as well such as magic powers to characters with special eye colors. I'm not sure how the story will turn out in the end quality wise, but I do hope you enjoy it!