Captain Eo X Jareth the Goblin King Omorashi Story in Development*NEED HELP*

Since 2018, I've been working on an omorashi story of Captain Eo because I absolutely fell in love with the concept of a super cute space captain leading a ragtag band of aliens in the 1980s. However, I got so many ideas(and no ideas at the same time) and I feel like I need everyone's opinions to make this a good story. I have a link to a doc of written dialogue in which I would like everyone to overview what I have so far and comment any suggestions/ideas that could help me.

*I do not intend to insult Michael Jackson or David Bowie in any way, shape, or form. This is about the fictional characters they played and not the real-life actors. This will all be edited later.