Blackthorne, Sweetbrier

This is a place for me to show some of the parts of my story that I've written and would like to get feedback on. This is not a full story just yet. Everything will be published in order of it happening within the story, so parts will be moved around.
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Blackthorne, Sweetbrier is the story of Charlotte Barlowe, a young girl running against time as she uncovers the tainted history of her family. She discovers her dark freckle beneath her left eye is a common attribute in the deceased children in her bloodline, all of which died a gruesome death. In her fight to keep herself alive, she meets the creature designed to keep her dead. The final trail will commence on the Harvest Moon in the year she turns 18, the ending deciding whether she lives to see tomorrow's sunrise or if she becomes another child, hidden beneath the lies of the Barlowe family.
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TRIGGER / CONTENT WARNINGS:
- severe mommy issues
- mentions of poor mental health and evidence of past harmful behaviors
- dead people (both undead and just regular dead)
- minor blood / gore