My shade of blue."eyeless Jack love story"

I hope you like my story I worked so hard on it so could you comment on the book and I would love to now your opinion.And my story is about a 17year old named "Jennifer"or her friends call her "Axel" she is starting to meet up with her past when she meets a blue mask person. And he starts to fall in love with her and she is the same way and what pains him that she is a proxy and he did this to her.