Love Scene

About me: so, I've always written, in some form, or other, but this the first time something I write makes it out of my hard drive.
So, I'm pleased I've found the guts to make something public (thank you, screen name!) but also super embarrassed...

About this "story": weeeeeell, it isn't REALLY a story. I got fed up with books either having no love/sex scene (hello, Breaking Dawn...seriously?! O.o) or going over the top, and making me cringe. I'm not a prude, but writing that is pointlessly titillating, as in, that is all it is trying to do, snaps me right out of the story.
So, I put myself up for a challenge: could I write a love scene that, didn't skim over all the "good bits" but not end up being a porn script?
I came up with this.
I wanted it to read like an excerpt, so I'll give you a quick background. She, Lilianne, is renting a room in Aleksey's house; a large, two floor Victorian home.
He's crazy about her, but has always been really reserved, so he never says anything, till she invites this guy over, and Aleks sees them flirting. He gets really angry, throws the guy out, and yells at her about having "random people" over at "his" house, and that she should show some respect. Poor Lilianne, not wanting him to see her cry, storms out of the room.
After Aleks calms down, and realises what he's done, he goes to find her.

Quick character physical description: she's short, with long, dark, straight hair.
He's taller than her, longish, bronze/light-brown hair. Add other features, and change these, as you wish. :)

I'd love to have some feedback.
I have NO idea if I'm any good at this. Again, I've NEVER let ANYONE read my stuff before.
So go ahead, tell me I'm awful, and give me a cookie. :D