The Darklings (Revisited)

So, I am entering a writing contest and i had to write a short story, 2 to 3 pages long. I considered many ideas, but then decided that my story The Darklings, which i posted on here a while ago, would be perfect. The only problem? It was much too short. So i re read the story and wrote it again, adding more to it in order to meet the requirements. Please give me some feedback on it!! Thank you all so much :)