Clockwork Cages

Eden lives in a clockwork world, every day the same as the next, everything coated in a thick layer of ashes and soot. In the industrial city of Arden, no one has more than what they need, and everyone works in the coal mines, or they live on the street. In a city torn apart by gangs on a regular basis, Eden survives on her sixteen hour work shifts, and her clockwork life.
Then it all changes when Alice moves in next door. If Arden was the moon, dim and grey, Alice would be the sun, bright and shining, with auburn hair untouched by the snows of ashes and soot that blankets everything with a stifling silence. Alice shatters the old clockwork and builds a new one, one that doesn't revolve around bare survival.
But what will happen, when bright and sunny Alice commits suicide, leaving Eden back in the ashes, soot, dust and mines?
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So, this is an idea I've had for a while, and I finally figured out how to write it. No hate or flames, but comments and constructive criticism are more than welcome.
10 reads and I'll upload part two.