Electric Party

Mary is at a party when she hears some terrible news. Her brother, John made a big mistake and she was going to make sure he never messed up again.

As with all my stories, feedback and criticisms are greatly appreciated! Anything you give me can help me write stories better to your liking in the future. Because I want to eventually write stories that get sold in book stores (yes I'm old) I really want to learn as much as I possibly can from all of my writing. So please, don't hold back. Don't worry about my feelings. I want to learn and I can't do that without feedback. Even if you just think my story is trash, that helps me to know!

This short story was written as part of a writing exercise for a fiction writing class I was in, where we needed to come up with a large, dramatic premise and then go very granular to write just one scene of that story, focusing on a moment of immense tension or conflict.