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A short story I wrote as part of a transfer application into the Tisch School of the Arts. It's something I wrote a while ago and now that it's time for submission, I'm not sure how good it is anymore. 

It's "no more than six pages of creative writing consisting of a complete short story". That's the prompt. Plenty to go on, right?

UPDATE: I was accepted! Thank you to everyone who read and critiqued it!All Rights Reserved

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