The Great Stallion (DISCO. BEING REWRITTEN)
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Hi everyone!
SHit! it's been a while!
I last updated this book in 2019 and then i gave up on it.
I pondered deleting the book and never touching it again but last night i was reading some of the chapters and fck! this book is terrible!
I love the plot idea i had but 17-year-old me was too immature to even attempt writing this.
So, 26-year-old me is going to attempt rewriting it...
its going to take some time but i already rewrote the first chapter and i really like it.
SO, I'm going to leave this book up for those who want to reminisce, but you can join me in the NEW VERSION of The Great Stallion
Which I think I will rename "KOALAK" which apparently is 'Healer' in dothraki or i might leave the title the same.
Help me in the comments to decide
'Koalak' or 'The Great Stallion'
i hope you guys are having a good day. And i will see you August 4th with the first chapter to the new version of this book.
TTYL Orelie.
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Isis is a girl with the power to repel all sickness. Her mother, before dying, wanted to name all her children after Greek Gods.
Being from one of the most ancient and mystical family,the Odarys, Isis quickly developed a power. She got it from her great grand mother, who was a healer. She could take any illness and make it disappear.
Iris, the sister of Isis, was really jealous of her. She was the only girl with light brown hair. All of the Odarys has dark ebony hair.
The peasants thought that she was the moat beautiful daughters of Braxton Odarys.
Mars was the oldest brother of Isis and Iris. He thought that to
have pure bloodline,he had to marry one of his sisters.
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