The Crescendence of Immortality

This is of this moment my first story I have made and so far. However I would like some constructive criticism to help better myself as a writer. This story is completely original. So expect a few hiccups here and there. Also any prior character sheets and art depicting my characters I have made are extremally outdated and as such they should not be considered when reading this story. And Finally all characters in this story will have a human like biology (anthro or bipedal) unless specifically stated otherwise and expect human animal hybrids in this story as pure blooded humans are few and far between and the reasoning for that will show up in the future chapters. Enjoy!