The Bloodstained Brother

So I wrote this when I was in year 8 and I found it and thought I was okay. It was originally meant to be a short story ending on a cliffhanger but I added more to it because I hate cliffhangers and decided I couldn't do that to anyone else. It is written from the perspective of a boy named Max who started to search for his little brother and a magic guy takes him to a different realm to find him and things escalate fairly quickly from there. Also added that he falls in love worth a girl which wasn't in the original story either but I wanted to so I thought why not.