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Hai appena finito di scrivere il tuo capolavoro, ma hai il sospetto che ci sia ancora qualcosa che non quadra? Non preoccuparti, perché sono qui per aiutarti! Benvenuto in Recensioni Spietate (ma amichevoli), il servizio di feedback per autori che non ha paura di dirti cosa va e cosa non va nella tua storia.
Dimentica i soliti complimenti ipocriti e le critiche distruttive: il mio obiettivo è quello di farti crescere come scrittore, con un pizzico di ironia e una spruzzata di leggerezza. Ti dirò se il tuo protagonista ha il carisma di una patata bollita o se il tuo finale è più prevedibile di una soap opera. Ma non temere, lo farò sempre con un sorriso e un buon consiglio.
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