Their last trip (Wip)
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Hi, i am starting to write my own story and i wanted to post here a bit of it to get some feedback, it's just a fragment as i have not finished it, i am completely new to writing and English isn't my main language, so any feedback is usefull, even grammar corrections
For context, the story is about a group of friends that get lost while hiking in a glacier (yes you can hike in a glaciar, i've done it, it's great) and this particular segment is when one of the group falls in to a crack, breaking his leg and getting trapped there
Thanks in advance
(This story is 100% fiction, any similitude with real people or events is 200% coincidence)
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