Chapter X

This is the start of a chapter of a romance/erotic novel. This chapter is somewhere in the middle of the book and is a sample to get feedback from those that like this type of writing. I have written before, but this is my first time in this genre and I am asking for opinions on my writing style and marketability for this work before I continue to expand on this story. While comments on grammar and the mechanics of my writing are welcome, this is pretty raw and unfinished so I am not expecting anybody to do a detailed dive into that. I just want to know if I am spinning my wheels on something that doesn't have potential.

While this portion is mostly a sex scene I do have a lot more meat to the story than this, but sex will be a prominent part of the book, but not all of it.