Eternal Code: La'lliia's Fire

(A/N) These characters just came to me one night. I never felt the need to write before that moment, so this is all a first for me. The story flowed from my mind to my keyboard late at night and I just fell in love with it all. So please share any comments you may have, and any errors will be noted and corrected, please be kind to this newbie. I am looking forward to reading any feedback. Thank you in advance for taking the time to read and evaluate my story.
Excerpt from prequel...
“Why?” She finally screamed at him. He was a broken man. His skin was blistered and burnt, bleeding from the fissures she had caused. The smell overwhelmed her for a moment.
He gasped in a breath, and she realized he must have inhaled some of the flames Christopher had surrounded him in when she had allowed him to breathe again. “Power.” He rasped. “Your force here alone is evidence of what you can be when you combine with him.” He looked towards Christopher’s prone form on the ground. “The child was an unknown…”
“And now she will never be!” She hissed at him. “But neither will you. You should have left us in peace. We would never have come for you.” She leaned in until she was face to face with him. “You lost your life when you took my daughters.” She saw the fear fill his eyes again, and she revealed in it. Without breaking eye contact she pictured his beating heart, her eyes narrowed as she crystallized his life source. His eyes widened as he felt her actions, he clasped a hand to his chest and drew in a staggered breath. “Two by two… You think…you…are removing…the serpents head, but…you know so little…” He gasped his last words. She raised her chin and with a firm set of her jaw, she watched the man die.