Suspense Experiment
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This is just a short story that I wrote to experiment with genres outside of my comfort zone. Tell me what you think and give me honest feedback! I want to know if paranormal activity is my thing. Is it suspenseful? Do I explain it enough? Is the cliff hanger at the end upsetting?
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