Kirian Tenegawa; Star Clan Has a Survivor?!!

Disclaimer: I do not own the characters besides Kirian, Lucien, and Lucille. My friend owns Grey, Cyn, and Michael. The others are all owned by the original creator of Soul Eater. I would greatly appreciate it if you would leave comments as to what could be fixed or changed, what you like, or any other sort of feedback. this is my first story and I want it to be the best it can, and would appreciate any help offered.