Don't Go Into The Light

So this is a prologue for a book that I thought of in the middle of the night. It's not fully finished and there might be some grammatical errors. If you find yourself reading it please let me know what you think and if I should continue writing. :)

ROUGH DESCRIPTION:
Carmen comes to consciousness a couple of streets away from her home. She doesn't know what happened but she knows that she has to remember something important. She soon finds that no one can see her and she gets frantic. There is one boy however who can. She tries to team up with Leo but he doesn't want anything to do with the girl who nobody else can see. The clock is ticking but Carmen doesn't know. Will she have enough time to figure out what is important before she disappears forever?

I realize that the description is total crap but I did it on the fly so hopefully I have time to come back and fix it later. Sorry!