Snow {First Chelley Oneshot}

Guys, I cannot stress how much I want feedback on this as I've never done a oneshot before (THE SHIP-SWAP CHALLENGE DID NOT COUNT I S2G) and I don't care what kind of feedback it is. I don't care if you say good or bad or if you give me constructive criticism (Gladys-not-glados.)Just, please, pretty please, give me feedback.

(Also, this was made around December, in my notes, so y'know there's no MLP in it lol. Also, Gladys-not-glados wow who's that?)