Forest of Shadows

In a world of magic, sorcerers reign. However, sorcerers also fight for power. The neighbouring countries of Herculea and Hades are at war, and magical battles can be costly. After one of their greatest sorcerers is taken, the Herculeans are close to defeat. The last hope for their people, a mismatched pair of apprentices must risk their lives journeying into enemy territory on a rescue mission. With the fate of the magical world on their shoulders, can the unlikely heroes change the course of the war and bring back victory?

This is a super short story that I wrote for my big, end-of-the-year creative writing project for my English class. It's an idea that I've had in mind for a while, and this gave me an excuse to write part of it. If this gets a positive reaction, I might write it out in novel form with the rest of the story. Right now it's in Campbell's form - condensed. A LOT. The parts are really insanely short, but I only got ten pages for the project, so it had to be that way. If anyone can take 15 minutes to read this, and comment what you think, it would be greatly appreciated.