A critique?? of my Wattpad Mary Sue writing style - HaruOta - Wattpad

A critique?? of my Wattpad Mary Sue writing style

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Reads 160
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Dying always sucks, especially if you don't remember much of your previous life. Join Rina when she goes through a life changing adventure with the Madagascar gang!

(Girls and gays and non-binary pals, please only read this if you are prepared to me roasting the hell out of myself)All Rights Reserved

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The gaming theory by SepticeyeLadd

Do "you" have what it takes to be in the vanoss crew? To be a YouTuber? To win your crush over? Who will even be your crush in this? This is (insert your name here) otherwise know as you, (Y/N), or "HEY DUMB ASS!" Na, just kidding. This is however a xreader story for Vanoss and his crew. Basically what happens is you're a girl YouTuber with about 500,000 subs. You recently moved to LA by yourself to get started with your "career." This all begins in the famous year of 2013.(Don't worry the years will progress as the book goes on) along the way.... things begin to happen. Okay, I could've done better. Like..... a lot better with that. But still (NOTE: THIS IS MY FIRST XREADER!) (CAUTION LANGUAGE!) COMPLETED!!!

Lui caliber x reader (Discontinued) by Kryinq

Firstly, I wanted to say this is my first time writing, so please don't judge that much!! If you have a request you can put it in the comments and I will try to write about it maybe :/ This story will be able a girl, Y/N (your name) Where you are part of the Banana Bus Squad (BBS) and you have 13 million subscribers! You are friends with VanossGaming but have yet to meet the rest of the crew, this story will (hopefully) be a life of you and Lui.. I like Lui don't judge me >:(

Banana bus crew--one shots by TooInsanelyBlue

***warning very shitty one shots lol*** This was my first time writing one-shots. I was also 13 at the time so It's very cringey and not good at all. There are a lot of spelling mistakes!! **Warning some of these may contain cussing,sexual content, etc.** *** I will no longer be making updates***

HIS LILY WITH BLISS by flames_heartt

"𝐼 𝑤𝑎𝑛𝑡 𝑦𝑜𝑢 𝑡𝑜 𝑏𝑒 𝑜𝑛𝑙𝑦 𝑚𝑖𝑛𝑒. 𝑁𝑜 𝑜𝑛𝑒, 𝑛𝑜𝑡 𝑒𝑣𝑒𝑛 𝐺𝑜𝑑, 𝑐𝑎𝑛 𝑠𝑎𝑣𝑒 𝑦𝑜𝑢 𝑓𝑟𝑜𝑚 𝑚𝑒. 𝑆𝑜 𝑤ℎ𝑜 𝑖𝑠 𝑡ℎ𝑖𝑠 𝑜𝑡ℎ𝑒𝑟 𝑚𝑎𝑛?" 𝐒𝐡𝐞 𝐬𝐭𝐚𝐦𝐦𝐞𝐫𝐞𝐝 𝐢𝐧 𝐩𝐫𝐨𝐭𝐞𝐬𝐭, "𝑁-𝑛𝑜...𝑝𝑙𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑒-" "𝑄𝑢𝑖𝑒𝑡, 𝑘𝑖𝑡𝑡𝑒𝑛. 𝑌𝑜𝑢 𝑚𝑢𝑠𝑡 𝑎𝑡𝑜𝑛𝑒 𝑓𝑜𝑟 𝑤ℎ𝑎𝑡 𝑦𝑜𝑢𝑟 𝑝𝑎𝑟𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑙𝑜𝑣𝑒𝑟 ℎ𝑎𝑣𝑒 𝑑𝑜𝑛𝑒,". 𝐡𝐞 𝐬𝐧𝐚𝐫𝐥𝐞𝐝 𝐄𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐲𝐭𝐡𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐛𝐥𝐮𝐫𝐫𝐞𝐝 𝐛𝐞𝐟𝐨𝐫𝐞 𝐡𝐞𝐫 𝐞𝐲𝐞𝐬 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐬𝐡𝐞 𝐥𝐨𝐬𝐭 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐬𝐜𝐢𝐨𝐮𝐬𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬. /ON THE OTHER HAND / "𝑆𝑜 𝑦𝑜𝑢'𝑟𝑒 𝑡𝑒𝑙𝑙𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑚𝑒 𝑦𝑜𝑢 𝑢𝑛𝑐𝑜𝑣𝑒𝑟𝑒𝑑 𝑛𝑜 𝑖𝑛𝑓𝑜𝑟𝑚𝑎𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛 𝑎𝑏𝑜𝑢𝑡 𝐿𝑖𝑙𝑦'𝑠 𝑤ℎ𝑒𝑟𝑒𝑎𝑏𝑜𝑢𝑡𝑠?" 𝐡𝐞 𝐭𝐡𝐮𝐧𝐝𝐞𝐫𝐞𝐝. "𝑆-𝑠𝑖𝑟! 𝑊𝑒 𝑡𝑟𝑖𝑒𝑑 𝑜𝑢𝑟 ℎ𝑎𝑟𝑑𝑒𝑠𝑡, 𝑏𝑢𝑡 𝑓𝑖𝑛𝑑𝑖𝑛𝑔 ℎ𝑒𝑟 𝑖𝑠 𝑛𝑜 𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑦 𝑡𝑎𝑠𝑘...𝑠𝑜 𝑠𝑜𝑟𝑟𝑦," T𝐡𝐞 𝐦𝐚𝐧 𝐬𝐭𝐚𝐦𝐦𝐞𝐫𝐞𝐝. "𝑈𝑠𝑒𝑙𝑒𝑠𝑠, 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑜𝑡 𝑜𝑓 𝑦𝑜𝑢! 𝑌𝑜𝑢𝑟 𝑎𝑝𝑜𝑙𝑜𝑔𝑖𝑒𝑠 𝑓𝑖𝑥 𝑛𝑜𝑡ℎ𝑖𝑛𝑔. 𝐼 𝑤𝑎𝑛𝑡 𝐿𝑖𝑙𝑦 𝑓𝑜𝑢𝑛𝑑, 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑦𝑜𝑢 𝑘𝑛𝑜𝑤 ℎ𝑜𝑤 𝐼 𝑑𝑒𝑠𝑝𝑖𝑠𝑒 𝑑𝑖𝑠𝑎𝑝𝑝𝑜𝑖𝑛𝑡𝑚𝑒𝑛𝑡," 𝐡𝐞 𝐬𝐩𝐚𝐭. *Shot*

My Boys by angelic_alexx

Joey didn't mean to catch them killing someone. He was just going for a walk in the park. He didn't know he'd get caught. He was just going to turn around and leave. He didn't know they'd heard him until he felt something go into his leg. - Joey Walker is 19, quiet, a little awkward, and seriously afraid of his parents. Every day was the same process of waking up only to be hit and screamed at until he left just to get away. During one of his walks at the park he frequently visited, two men caught his attention and what happened next... Joey couldn't believe it. - ⚠️ Trigger Warning⚠️ This book is 18+ and handles mature themes. I can't tell you not to read it but if you do, that is on you. This story has the following: Abuse Torture Assault Pregnancy from Sexual Assault Sexual Activities Harsh Language If there is anything here that triggers you, please don't read. Anyways, have a fun day and enjoy your reading:) *My Boys is currently going through minor editing so if something seems a little off like headings and stuff, that is why* - #1 in #MentalHealth from April 2023 - February 2025 #1 in #MentalHealth - April 14, 2023 #6 in #Assault - April 21, 2023 #5 in #BxBxB - May 7, 2023 #3 in #bxblove - May 7, 2023 #1 in #MentalHealth - March 28, 2024 #7 in #BxBxB - March 28, 2024 #6 in #Fear - April 6, 2024 #5 in #BxBxB - April 25, 2024 #9 in #Foundfamily - May 8, 2024 #1 in #Money - May 21, 2024 #4 in #Mentalhealthawareness - July 27, 2024 #4 in #Queer - January 7, 2025 #3 in #MentalHealthAwareness - January 14, 2025 #3 in #FoundFamily - March 20, 2025 #7 in #Fight - April 4, 2025 #8 in #Money - April 16, 2025 #4 in #MentalIllness - May 4, 2025

What Is This Feeling Inside? by NoireEtRouge

You've just arrived at the acadamy with your brother. You met many differnt people but all friends, two dumb boys, annd two smart girls. You were born after your twin brother. You love him so but his weird a flickion with everything symetrical, which makes life hard on you. Since, your dependent on him to help you with your conition of being alergice to the sun.You've always get bad burns from it an sometimes you'd even passed out. This is for girls only. This is also on my quotev account. At BloodyNightmareoftheDead

My Vampire mommies by alex_ghramb

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A Modern Little Princess by dat_kayleewrites

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The gaming theory

Do "you" have what it takes to be in the vanoss crew? To be a YouTuber? To win your crush over? Who will even be your crush in this? This is (insert your name here) otherwise know as you, (Y/N), or "HEY DUMB ASS!" Na, just kidding. This is however a xreader story for Vanoss and his crew. Basically what happens is you're a girl YouTuber with about 500,000 subs. You recently moved to LA by yourself to get started with your "career." This all begins in the famous year of 2013.(Don't worry the years will progress as the book goes on) along the way.... things begin to happen. Okay, I could've done better. Like..... a lot better with that. But still (NOTE: THIS IS MY FIRST XREADER!) (CAUTION LANGUAGE!) COMPLETED!!!