Traveller Girl
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This is a sample of my book 'Traveller Girl'. Please tell me what you think.
Updates will be slow, and I will only be posting the Prologue and the first five chapters.
When you tell me what you think, please don't just say, "Love it! Keep going!" I want constructive feedback: how can I improve? Is there a certain line which doesn't quite fit? Let me know. Even the smallest of things.
Thanks.
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