Evil Critiques
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Last published Wed, May 4, 2016
I am an evil person. And I am here to either rip your story apart and tear it to shreds, fix a lot of minor issues, or love you till the day you die.
Your story decides.
Warning: The average story will be in the category of: "I am Satan and I shall rip your story apart."
But if you think you've got what it takes to withstand a critique and come out above me?
Well, I applaud your confidence. Come on in.
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You frown a bit, deciding whether to take it or leave it. Someone may come back... Even so you slowly open the front cover to read the first page. --- He told me I should keep a journal. Write down everything I could about my life. He said it would help for those mortals of the future. I said no. I thought it was stupid. But I will honor his last wish --- I'm a creature of darkness. I'm an abomination. I'm an outcast. I'm no one. I'm X. *DISCONTINUED*
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