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Ari

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This is the unedited, first chapter or so of my new book, "Ari", for my fans to read and critique. Please feel free to leave some constructive criticism whilst I get the creative juices flowing!

PLEASE NOTE: Cover, description, edited updates to come.

My first book, "Until it All Changed" is PG 13, however, "Ari" WILL be classified as mature due to strong language, sexuality, and other mature themes.All Rights Reserved

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