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This is my first fictional piece for something other than school that I've written! I feel accomplished, even though I shouldn't! That's a good feeling, right? Time is the story of Travis, a boy who is thrust into the dangerous worlds of the Forces, the Infinite, and-dreadful as it is-thinking. For the first time in his life, he gets to experience the world, instead of living in the peaceful forest with his guardians. Let's see what happens, shall we? Reading the Prologues is important! They're pretty much chapters too, but they're reserved for mainly stories from the point of view of Forces. This story takes place in a world separate from Earth. In this world, people have Gods and Forces. Gods are the beings they pray to, and the Forces are the things that do all the work. It's a win-win relationship. This is my first full story. You may say that it sucks as much as you want... if you want to. I'd like constructed criticism. Confused by any of the magic, physics, or beliefs? Any questions at all can be asked in the comments for each story part. Sorry, but the different font types I used for the Forces (such as American Typewriter for Death) wouldn't work. I can't change font size for some other characters either, so you don't really get the full effect. I'll try to add more description to how they talk so that the effect is not lost. This book is finished!!!! The next book, currently being written, is Nature! If you liked this, please check Nature out!
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This story is complete, though incomplete. For elaboration, I have completed it how I wanted it, in the sense of me working and chipping away at it to get it printed off for my father to read, seeing as he wanted to read, edit, and attempt to get it published (He had called a publishing company the other day about it). Incomplete in the sense that I don't have all the scenes I really want now more than I did when I was in the process of writing it. For example, in the previous chapter one, there was a small scene that had Aaren, Travis, Loyd, Scott, Gabe, and Xander fighting in Lord Sylvie's house. I had changed it so that they moved outside, seeing as I imagined Sylvie's house as a small, quaint house, so it would only make sense that they all fought OUTSIDE instead of INSIDE. Also incomplete in the sense that I strongly dislike the way I wrote it. I've gotten some 'inspiration' from my dad about (spoiler) killing her in the end, so I came back to change it before we went into really editing the pages (grammar, spelling, etc). That's all I really wanted to communicate with you guys, so if you remember something specific about the previous book, I changed it because I disliked how it wrote it. Hope you enjoy it for what it is otherwise. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ A young girl, Shadow Gillian Wagner, avoids Rosewood at all costs. In fact, she avoids all villages, expect for one that changed her. Shadow, and her two companions, Xander and Gabe, had been taken to Acorntop village, where they have good and bad moments, love and war. Though 'war', might literally. What will happen on this interesting adventure of the girl and her friends? Find out in 'Shadow Wagner the Slayer; Book 1 (Do I Belong?)'

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